Industrial Abstract No. 15

Welcome and thanks for posting! 

This is an interesting image to put on the professional critique board.  Can you tell us a little about it? 
I personally like it, it has an urban gritty feel, and there is almost something lonely about it.  Probably because fences are for locking people either in or out.  The lines are interesting, the treatment lends to the gritty feel.  Can you tell us about how you processed it?

As far as composition goes, I might have moved the corner part (with the dark black lines) more to the right side of the image, right now it's not dead center and it's not uncentered really either.

I like industrial/urban stuff and would like to see more.  Is this part of a series?

Just a note about the professional critique area (you probably already know) - Not everyone can post here.  It's designed to give honest critique and help you get better.  If you want more comments you may also post it in the open areas of the forum as well.

Of course everyone is welcome to put up images for critique.  You seem to understand the board just fine.  And just to stick up for the other members here - some of them have a great eye for critique, even if they are hobbyists.  Anyway, more of the critiquers should be along here soon.

I like images like this that I have to think about before I can come up with something to say.  I really like the idea and think there's a lot of potential in what you shot.  It just doesn't seem to work quite right for me.  My eye is drawn to the light area on the top right which could probably be taken care of with cropping. I'm also not a big fan of the vertical line almost dead center in frame. 

The biggest issue I see is that there really isn't that much tonal range.  The subject is almost all black and the background is almost all gray.  Would you be able to go back, either to the file digitally or actually back to the same place, and get a little more tone into the shot?

I like the second one a lot better.  This is going to come out as a petty difference, but I think I like it more because I can tell what it is because it has "600 volts" on the wiring.  There's also more of a 3 dimensional feel to the image.

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I'm always impressed with those that jump in posting an image as their first post. 

The second posted is my favourite.  Perhaps it's what Ryan mentioned about the words, but I think the lines and composition are pleasing and interesting.

Part of the problem is that abstractions are inherently difficult to critique.  I could say that the image doesn't stand on it own and needs to be put into context as part of a series, but this board is about single images and their sucess or failure. 

This image doesn't do anything for me personally.  What I see looks soft and the lack of detail in the dark area down the center doesn't see in touch with the remainder of the image.  I think that it could be greatly improved by cropping from the right, leaving what I guess is the mounting (but it does need more detail) and the shadow.  I don't think that the screen on the right adds anything to the image, particually as an abstraction. 

I do like the other images considerably more, but they were not really posted here for critique. 

One thing that I would add is that you should consider adding a frame, stroke or boarder around images, particularly B&W images when posting on our website.  With this site using a white background, your images are bleeding into the background.  A border will prevent this no matter where the image is posted.

Ed