Teenager

The main light is too high causing "raccoon eyes" or lack of shadow detail or clarity in the eyes.  The lighting has also created shadows with renders the nose poorly- it seems misshapen.  In the shot with the had- you have to lower the light to get under the brim- "dead eyes" result without proper light and adequate fill.   

When working out of doors it is important to seek out good light.  You cant move the light around like in the studio but you can move your subject into better light or modify the lighting with reflectors and gobos.

Ed Shapiro

Which ever solution you want to use . . . lower the light or add a reflector below the face . . . you do need to get more light into this young ladies face.  One thing that I noticed in the second image is the size of her pupils.  This indicates that it was fairly dark in the studion when this was lit.  Adding more ambiant light (modeling lights?) will close her pupils and give more color to her eyes.  Adding more light to them during the exposure will allow them to "pop" a little more and make the image more alive.

Ed

Hi Theo!

You have a great interaction with your clients, I see.  She looks completely at ease. ;c)

Lighting issues aside (( since they've been covered )) I wanted to add my take on the post processing of this image.  If you are offended by my rework, please let me know and I will remove it.

I know that as photographers, our main goal is to get it as perfect as we can, straight from the camera, but in this day and age of digital manipulation, well...  it's always good to go a little further. ;c)

I brightened the eyes and the overall image... whitened the teeth and removed a few stray hairs as best as I could given the small file size. I also cloned a little under her eyes to remove the raccoon look.

A great image!

Yvette